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Monday, 11 April 2016

This is my writing assessment, I have worked on improving it's punctuation,spelling and vocabulary.



Riding a motorbike.


On Saturday we were at home then we heard a motor bike. Well it was getting closer it was getting louder. Guess who it was?  Brother Andy and Tarea.


Then I zoomed outside and ups him then he offered me a ride. The motor bike was as fast as a skimming rock. ” I am off cuzzies” I said to my brothers.I started the motor bike. I counted down 3 2 1 kick it then it started. The exhaust went !Brumm brumm brumm!I said to my brothers “this motor bike is sick.” I went around the house and off on to the road.


When I was on road I thought I heard a vehicle. It sounded like a helicopter. so chopped down and turned around.!brumm brumm brumm chik chik! Then I went home.


I handed it over. I walked back inside with a big smile. Shortly after that he was leaving. But we had a ice cream before he left. Then we had a delicious as breakfast.


Then for the rest of the day we relaxed. I will remember the day riding a little motor bike. That day made my day. It was

awesome,amazing,exciting,wonderful, and I was thankful.

3 comments:

  1. Heyy Aj like yu put in !Brumm brumm brumm! because it's describing how it sounded like it was grunty then

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  2. Heyy Aj like yu put in !Brumm brumm brumm! because it's describing how it sounded like it was grunty then

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  3. sup AJ I like that story that you made it was cool as man I like that
    part when your brother said I am off cuzzies that was funny that story
    was mean bye man

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